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Consider Me Your Saving Grace by =Jazzman1989:iconJazzman1989:

Categories Contests > 2008 > Villainous Villanelles


Cinderella, heed my words; you will be my slave,
so do my dishes, make my food, and oblige my every desire.
I am not a bad woman; I just ask for those around me to behave.

You are a beautiful girl my dear, but you are just a knave,
so listen to me closely, and you will love me like your sire.
Cinderella, heed my words; you will be my slave.

The biddings you must perform will make your suitors rave,
and your more lovely and beloved stepsisters, only crave to sink you in a mire.
I am not a bad woman; I just ask for those around me to behave.

Your fairy godmother is the only one that can help you, you poor penniless knave,
so rid yourself of your dignity and show me how you tire.
Cinderella, heed my words; you will be my slave.

I will beat you into submission, so your heart is but a cave,
and then you will come to thank and love me like it is dire.
I am not a bad woman; I just ask those around me to behave.

Your father is no help, and I will not let you be so brave
to go against my every wish, for your life hangs by such a thin wire.
Cinderella, heed my words; you will be my slave.
I am not a bad woman; I just ask for those around me to behave.
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:aww: Enjoy :aww: This is the villanelle I wrote for [link] held by :iconpoetryplease: My inspiration is off of the "evil?" stepmother of cinderella, which was written by Charles Perrault in 1697. He is also the not-so-well-known author of "Tales of Mother Goose." (Fun Fact = The glass slippers were originally fur slippers. They became glass after they mistranslated the story, which was in french, and fur they were no more.)

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=Out-Of-Spite Oct 20, 2008, 1:05:00 PM
I think you did a great job showing both sides of her. Like the contest said, it didn't have to really come out evil but try to keep it scary and you did just that.

Great job dear

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=Jazzman1989 Oct 20, 2008, 1:12:43 PM
Thanks :) I tried really hard to pull something out for this contest. I was having a really hard time, and I think it works somewhat. :hug::hug::hug:

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=Out-Of-Spite Oct 20, 2008, 2:08:36 PM
You're welcome!

yea this was a very difficult contest. I don't think I'll be doing something as structured as this ever again lol

yours works dear :hug: It's better than you made it out to be

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=Jazzman1989 Oct 20, 2008, 2:48:00 PM
It was the only thing that seemed right and fair to my grandpa. He wouldn't have wanted to see me that way :tears:

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~nuisance15 Oct 20, 2008, 6:06:12 PM
:clap: Wow this is great! I absolutely love it. It really does a great job of portraying the stepmother character. ^.^
Awesome work!
:hug:
~M

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R.I.P. Steven Taylor Riles 1989-2008
R.I.P. Steven Riles Beloved father...

~Merryde Anne Tavora~
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=Jazzman1989 Oct 20, 2008, 6:20:29 PM
Thank you :) :hug:

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